I enjoyed reading Emily's review and I think that she makes some good points. She says that the novel is "easy to read" and this resulted from Relin placing verbs at the beginning of sentences to give clarity. I agree, yet Emily did not give an example of this, which I think would have added some validity to her point.
Emily goes on to write about a disconnect between Relin and Mortenson and how the novel fails to make the reader feel "engulfed in the culture". I think Emily is right in saying that Relin does not convey Mortenson's experiences as well as Mortenson could himself, but I do not agree this takes away from the ethnographic value of the novel. Emily writes "in terms of foreign relationships I think this book does an excellent job", and in my opinion culture can be seen through these relationships. What better way is there to access a culture than becoming friends with the people and being able to see their everyday interactions.
I thought that this review was well written and that Emily did a good job keeping her subjects clear and placing verbs close to the beginning of sentences. Sentences such as "Relin placed...", "Since Relin wrote...", and "However, in terms of foreign relationships..." all have clarity because of clear subjects and verbs. Finally on a whole I thought that this piece tied together nicely. Emily has two paragraphs one about form and one about content. The first flows nicely into the second paragraph and together I think they do a great job of expressing her ideas.
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